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2018年6月4日 星期一

留學申請寫好SOP? 請聽美國名校評審委員怎麼說? 附真實範文與履歷等求學(求職)三寶可下載。


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又到了申請學校的旺季,經常有同學來詢問SOP該怎麼寫?教練提供的這篇文章,提供有需要的同學下載。請下載並參考這些名校錄取範本。這次再加上商學院申請範本。這些都只是參考範文罷了,不代表一定是最棒的。SOP要按照自己的規畫與需求來寫,大家可以看看別人的寫法,再想想自己的該怎麼寫。如果需要英文履歷English Resume,也可以參考教練寫過的版本。另外想要下載求職三寶請點我

What makes a good statement of purpose for graduate school?



申請美國大學最重要的文件排序

1. 托福成績 (破百真的比較好申請到不錯的學校,美國前50大名校托福要超過100)
    其中某些特定科系會特別重視寫作口說的成績。

2. GPA(非常重要,越好的學校越重視)

3. GRE與GMAT成績 (成績儘量考高一點,才有機會進排名好的學校)

4. SOP /CV/ Biography (爛英文或是不知所云的自傳,會讓你馬上被審核委員剔除)

5. Recommendation Letters (除非幫你寫推薦函的人是總統、財團大亨或諾貝爾獎得主,若非大咖就不用指望了,當然還是要交,不過就是形式罷了。)

我對大多同學寫SOP的意見,真的跟下面三所名校的admissions officials一樣。
之前我也曾擔任過U of Michigan(我的母校)系上的研究生申請審核的委員
committee member之一,所以對於美國名校挑學生的過程可說是再熟悉不過,在此要奉勸同學,寫SOP有幾個原則一定要遵守:

1.不要一直往自己臉上貼金說真的,你的程度如何,考試的成績與相關分數會說明。

2. SOP不是回憶錄,童年際遇點到為止,別寫得落落長,沒人有時間消化。

3.不要賣弄幽默感這樣會給人輕浮的感覺。

4.所有內容都要跟未來的研究領域相關,不相關的不要寫。

5.教育背景要交待清楚訊息宜言簡意賅。

6.文法正確,結構嚴謹,內容清楚這是基本要件。

7.不要抄襲,否則是零分,範本參考就好。

8.對於所申請的學校要有一定了解,不要亂投一通,或是一稿多投(真要一稿多投也請稍微調整或是修飾一下內容)。申請博士班的學生,更要對自己的研究領域與相關學校的教授科系資源等有一定的認識。

9.請說重點

10. 第一段的內容就要引人入勝直接切入正題不要繞來繞去

接下來且聽聽來自哈佛,NYU紐約大學與耶魯大學admissions officials怎麼說。
紅字是我節錄的翻譯,僅提供同學參考,大家還是要看一下英文的版本。
此文分為上下兩部分,Part I & Part II

Part I

David P. Giovanella (DG), New York University, Graduate School of Arts & Science, Graduate Enrollment Services - The statement of purpose is one of the most important parts, if not the most important part, of the application.

SOP是申請入學時最重要的文件之一

Gregg Glover (GG), Associate Director of Admissions, Harvard Graduate School of Education - For our process at HGSE, it is very important. We often announce that it's the most important single item in an applicant's application. The essay can make or break a person's chances for admission, which is probably true at most schools. We are not test score driven in our process, so the statement takes on much more weight. Remember, the statement is the only part of the process that you have complete control over: you cannot change your GPA, or create the content of your letters of reference, but you can determine the finished product of your statement.

SOP是最重要的文件,這篇文章幾乎是決定這個學生是否能被獲准入學的關鍵項目之一,不只是哈佛如此,其他學府也一樣。哈佛不是一個只在乎考試成績的學校,所以SOP的比重可想而知。大家不要忘記,所有的申請文件中,SOP是申請人唯一能控制與處理的文件,因為你的GPA無法被改變,介紹信的內容,決定權不在你,你唯一可以主導的,是SOP的內容。

Dr. Liza Cariaga-Lo (LCL), Assistant Dean, Yale Graduate School of Arts and Sciences - The personal statement is very important, as it is often (in cases where there is no interview requirement) the only opportunity for the student to share information about themselves that they think is relevant to their pursuit of graduate study.

SOP非常重要,尤其在沒有面試的狀況之之下,你的SOP提供了一個讓學校認識你的方式。透過SOP申請人得以分享跟自己有關的訊息,並且藉此提供當事人申請研究所意願背後的動機。

好的SOP應該要具備哪些條件?

1.
DG - NYU: It should be typed. 請打字
The applicant should outline their goals and aspirations. Present information chronologically, and show your writing skills and style.

請明確說明研究目標與展望,請按時間順序來提供訊息,另外好好展現你英文寫作的文采

GG - Harvard: The statement of purpose should demonstrate excellence in writing and clarity of thinking. It functions as a writing sample, often the only one you submit. Make it as solid a piece of writing as possible. It can also function as your interview if none is required. It is a chance to introduce yourself and describe who you are, what your background is, and what is important to you.

SOP講求的是一流的寫作功力。對admission officers而言,SOP是展示申請者文筆與思維的一個方式。內容要具體明確,請將SOP想像成是一個訪談(如果你的申請過程中,學校無法安排一對一的面談)這是你介紹自己語描述自己的最佳機會,請介紹你的背景與你認為重要的觀點

Perhaps more importantly, the statement is an opportunity for an applicant to describe his or her purpose in pursuing graduate study. Why this school, and/or this specific program? What are your reasons for graduate study? What is your plan in pursuing this degree? In the statement we look to see how well the candidate knows the school and justifies their reasons for studying there.

Another way to think about it is to consider "focus and fit": are your interests in graduate study focused, and is there a good fit with your interests and the particular program or school? This requires carefully researching the school or program to which you are applying. Read about the program's emphasis, the nature of the required courses, the work or research of its faculty. The more you know about the program to which you are applying, the better. You will sound more knowledgeable and more convincing in your essay.

另外更重要的是,你得透過SOP去解釋你為何要申請某個學校?你的理由與計畫是什麼?受理申請的學校通常會透過SOP,看看申請者對這個特定學校的了解有多少?你將如何將興趣與研究內容作完美的結合?想要回答這樣的問題,你必須先了解所申請的學校,提供何種研究計畫,需要深入了解才答得出來,千萬別呼攏人。你對所申請的學校與教授越是了解,你的SOP就越有說服力。


Admissions committees at our school are trying to determine what the school or specific program can offer to the applicant, and what the applicant can potentially offer in return. It's a two way street: do we have what the applicant wants and needs? If admitted , how will this person contribute to our community? The essay allows you to express this. We also look for an applicant's commitment to the field of education, and the statement of purpose is an excellent place for an applicant to describe what fuels that commitment and where the source of his or her passions lie.

所以申請學校是個two- way process,申請者在找合適的學校,學校也在找合適的申請人。這跟找工作沒什麼兩樣。所以站在學校的考量,他們也會去思考,這樣的學生來我們的學校能提供我們什麼?所以請務必在SOP裡面提到這一點。告訴你要申請的學校,他們為什麼要選擇你,而不是別人?你有什麼是別人沒有的。(好比男生跟女生求婚一樣,為什麼對方要嫁給你不是嫁給別人哩?)

For essays to research-based doctoral programs, it's important to remember the following issues: Have you clearly articulated your potential research interests? Have you determined if the particular department, or specific faculty members in it, can support your research? We prefer that our doctoral applicants identify potential faculty with whom they might work to produce the dissertation. This requires you to carefully research the scholarly interests of the faculty and to clearly think through your own research ideas. You do not have to identify your specific dissertation questions.

對於申請博士班與一些特定研究計畫的學生而言,要特別注意下面幾個議題:

1. 請問你有清楚的將自己未來的研究興趣表達出來嗎?
2. 你有表明某個特定學校的科系或是教授能夠幫助你,支持你完成這個研究計畫嗎?
3. 最好點名某某教授,指名要跟他學習,(因為這代表你得先做功課,先去了解某個教授的研究領域或是某個學校的科系強項與你自己的目標是否一致)
4. 不過對於博士論文相關的問題,在申請階段不需要表明。

LCL - Yale: The goal of the statement of purpose is to provide (concisely, thoughtfully and in a well-organized, easy to read format) information about the student's path to pursuing graduate study in this particular field. The statement should cover the following areas: (1) his/her motivation for applying to graduate school, (2) relevant experiences and academic coursework that have prepared him/her for graduate study in the field, (3) characteristics and strengths that make him/her particularly well-suited to graduate study in the discipline and within the graduate program he/she is applying to, (4) academic plan for graduate study, (5) future career objectives.

SOP不可或缺的要素:

精簡 完整 流暢 好讀

內容請包含

1. 申請動機
2. 相關學術經驗(相關工作經驗也可以- 這是Chloe補充的)
3. 你為何會是理想人選?(請說服admission officers)
4. 研究的計畫
5. 未來就業的計畫與勾勒的藍圖

What would you consider red flags?
請問哪些是SOP的大忌?

DG - NYU: It's a red flag when the statement is not typed, not well thought out, or an edited statement designed for another school.
         
手寫的SOP(沒打字的),組織與內容凌亂草率,或是明顯的一稿多投(一看就知道同一份拿去投另一份學校的)。


GG - Harvard: Poor grammar and usage in an essay certainly signal a red flag to admissions committees, as does an inappropriate fit with program. It's not a good sign if the applicant demonstrates little knowledge of program or school, or worse, names another school in the essay by mistake! Presentation matters: have others read the essay for grammar and ideas.
Similarly, if an applicant demonstrates a lack of relevant experience, sounds naïve, inexperienced, or unfocused and unprepared for graduate study in an essay, it can hinder his or her application. For doctoral essays, poor articulation of research interests can also hurt an applicant's chances.

文法錯誤百出的通常就是警訊。


不會被錄取的申請者

申請者需求跟學校所能提供的研究方向不符
對於所申請的學校了解不多
在SOP裡面提到的是另外一個學校的校名的,這更是大忌!
缺乏相關經驗
語氣一派天真無邪
缺乏重點
感覺上沒準備好
申請博士班的,要將研究範圍與相關主題明確表達,不然可能不會被錄取

LCL - Yale: Too much personal information that is not directly relevant to why you want to pursue graduate study in a discipline area (e.g., lengthy stories about your childhood), unexplained gaps in a student's educational pathway, and demonstrated lack of understanding about a particular field or the program/institution you are applying to (e.g., making naive or erroneous remarks regarding research) are all red flags.



  1. 過多的個人資訊,少提及研究的領域與興趣的,這不是好的SOP.
  2. 太長的SOP不討喜,一直在提童年際遇的不明智(除非跟所學相關,就算相關
  3. 也要懂得適可而止)
  4. 另外求學的過程要按年代一一解釋,中間不能有落掉的(是休學了還是怎樣?),
  5. 記得不完整記錄的,會影響錄取機會
  6. 對於申請的科系 學科或是學校了解不夠的,不會被錄取(如在文中對欲申請的學校
  7. 提出一些不正確看法的,也是大忌!


Part II (請大家看英文原版的,紅字是問題,黑字是答案)

Our three admissions experts from Harvard, NYU, and Yale return to offer additional insight into what should and should not be a part of your statement of purpose.

How should an applicant deal with discrepancies in their record (grades, test scores, etc.)?
在校或是考試成績表現不一致該怎麼處理?

David P. Giovanella (DG), New York University, Graduate School of Arts & Science, Graduate Enrollment Services:

Applicants should either include this in the personal statement or add an amendment paragraph briefly describing the situation.

Gregg Glover (GG), Associate Director of Admissions, Harvard Graduate School of Education:

The statement of purpose can be a useful place to discuss discrepancies in your record if no other appropriate place in the application exists to do so. For example, one can explain further why a GPA declined one year due to a severe personal hardship. While some applications provide a separate space for such explanations, the statement provides the opportunity to elaborate on specific situations if they are relevant.

Try not to leave any doubts or questions in the minds of the admissions committee. Admissions committees are, at some level, trying to determine if the applicant will succeed, and hopefully thrive, in their program, and the statement can allow you the chance to present your case most accurately and fairly. But do not dwell on discrepancies, either.

Dr. Liza Cariaga-Lo (LCL), Assistant Dean, Yale Graduate School of Arts and Sciences:

You should mention any discrepancies in your academic record briefly (1-3 sentences) and perhaps provide an explanation of the circumstances as to why this happened and how you have addressed these issues. You may wish to ask one of your recommenders to briefly provide some explanation as to why there are issues in your record.

Are there any special topics that should be covered in the statement of purpose?
SOP裡面還要包含什麼特別的主題嗎?

DG:
Applicants should discuss educational objectives, career plans, how their past experience contributed to future goals, why the particular program interested them, and how they will relate to the program. The applicant should show that she/he has researched the program.

LCL:
You should definitely discuss your specific research interests in the program you are applying to and how your interests match with the interests of faculty and or resources that the particular program has to offer. You should include a brief discussion of relevant research experiences which have allowed you to clarify your educational and career objectives in the field, as well as your understanding of the current relevant research literature in your field.
Also, clearly explain your career objectives and what you hope to accomplish once you receive a PhD. These objectives should be realistic and well-informed, not idealistic and vague.

What should you not include in the statement? 
請問SOP裡面有什麼是不能寫的?

DG: The applicant should not repeat him or herself, be grandiose不要自讚自誇, or be too long.

GG: It is not wise to include irrelevant or excessive personal information, or to try to be overly humorous不要自以為幽默. Also, the essay should always keep to the required length.

LCL: If you are applying to PhD programs, you should not spend a lot of time describing your extracurricular and/or volunteer activities unless it is directly relevant to the PhD program of study you are applying to. PhD admissions committees are interested in whether or not you have the ability to become an outstanding scholar in the field and whether or not you are a good fit with the academic environment and resources offered within their program.

 How personal should you get? 
關於自我描述的部分可以寫到什麼程度?

DG: This is up to the individual applicant.

GG: It's acceptable to offer insights to an admissions committee about who you are and what is important to you, or what is driving your desire for graduate study. At our school, the reasons for pursuing programs in education can often be personal ones, derived from an applicant's personal or professional experiences. It is fine to describe these, and sometimes powerful to do so. An applicant may benefit by describing one's "passion," but only in a context that is relevant to the proposed graduate study.

One shouldn't, however, get too personal or offer too much biography in the statement. For example, four pages of biography in a five-page essay are too much長達四五頁的自我介紹真的太多了! Do not include a laundry list of activities or repeat one's resume. Include the resume instead如果個人經驗實在太豐富,請列一份履歷出來就好(條列式的,別把SOP當自傳來寫), and highlight an important experience or two. I would only include personal information that is 1) relevant and 2) compelling and important to one's desire for graduate study. Personal information should not outweigh a discussion of an applicant's plan or reasons for graduate study in an essay. Remember, writing essays for graduate applications is about making choices -- what to include, what to highlight, what to elaborate upon.

LCL: Do not spend a lot of time talking about your personal life story; and mention it only briefly if it's relevant to your motivation for graduate study.

35 則留言:

  1. 請問老師:

    如果在學校有異常表現不好的科目(被當)
    應該要在SOP解釋並概述從中學到的教訓嘛?

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  2. Hi 莎莎

    我的建議是除非沒有其他可以寫的內容了,不然不要主動提,除非這個事件跟後來某件成功的事情有關,又或者這件事情讓你獲得啟發最後終究努力向上。所以你可以評估該在裡面放甚麼內容。先放正面的內容、或是跟日後所學有關的經驗,再考慮要不要講比較負面的東西。跟學科有關的負面訊息當然能避免最好。總之SOP上面的負面經驗一定要能導入變成正面的,不然會有反效果。

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  3. 老師您好,想請問您如果已被某大學的研究所錄取,並且辦理休學的話是否要寫入CV中? 如果在CV上有提及,並且在SOP中解釋休學的原因,這樣會有加分的效果嗎??

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  4. Hi April,

    CV要寫的是你的專業經驗,就是履歷(可以參考我部落格標籤雲的履歷格式與內容),既然是記載專業經驗,所以應該不用特別註明辦理休學這類的事情。SOP如果要提及休學,也要跟未來的研究計畫有連結。一般SOP都是寫未來入學的研究計畫或是方向,所以要不要特別註明休學一事見仁見智。但是我認為CV是不必加的。因為你的問題很簡短,我就只能籠統回答。若有問題可以再留言。

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  5. 謝謝老師的回覆!
    我會再仔細斟酌一下,有問題再請教老師:)

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  6. OK April, 有問題再留言沒關係!

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  7. 老师,您好!
    我准备申请美国的硕士,我在sop里专门用一段话讲了我对某位教授在跟我比较match的方向的某一篇论文的看法,但是没有提到其他教授,这种过于针对、具体的做法会不会对我的申请造成负面效果呢?
    谢谢!

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  8. Hi Yuanging,

    SOP的主要內容,在於勾勒未來的研究計畫與藍圖。所以根據這個大原則,任何內容只要是符合這個方向都可以,所以在sop裡專門用一段話,提及你對某位教授在跟你比較match的方向的某一篇論文的看法,如果這一段內容可以清楚凸顯出你未來的研究方向那就可以。所以問題不是提到某個教授,而是這段內容是否能反映你要表達的重點:也就是你的研究興趣、目的、過去的相關經驗與個人的優勢等等。

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  9. 谢谢老师的解答!
    老师,那我这样写可不可以:先写我被某位教授的某个方向的研究所吸引,然后具体讲到某一篇文章的内容,最后说我想加入他的团队,在这个方向深入下去。这样符合sop的要求吗?
    谢谢老师!

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  10. Hi Yuanqing,

    其實內容架構每個人寫的不盡相同,只要能凸顯你的優勢並且勾勒出清楚的研究方向就好。最後也是最重要的事情,就是托福與GRE都要高分(最好比學校規定的門檻分高一點比較保險),這兩個考試分數夠高,即便SOP內容稍微弱一點都無妨。相反的,如果SOP寫得很好,但是GRE與托福成績不夠,那無論如何都無法錄取理想學校的。加油喔,願你一切順利!

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  11. 你好老師,
    我準備申請Master of science online program, 我了解老師你說的"勾勒未來的研究計畫與藍圖", 我也有留意一些資料說要突顯出自己的潛在能力, 我打算加上一些工作上面的表現,大約是用了一年就得到了提升, 也被多次排到國外出差.
    請問這會有加分效果嗎?

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  12. Hi Lam,

    工作表現確實能夠加分,但一定要確切說明這些表現對於未來學習到底有什麼貢獻或是好的影響,你要能夠清楚地連結出來,而不是只是描述工作表現而已。大多數的人都只將一些得獎或是工作特殊表現寫出來,但是卻沒有說明這些經驗或是記錄跟未來所學有什麼樣的相關性。所以請記得一定要能適度將過去經驗與未來學習目做出連結,或是透過這些經驗強化個人的能力,這樣才能真正有加分效果喔。

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  13. 老師你回得好快喔,我覺得你說的有道理,要是我是閱讀者,我會有同樣的想法.

    這個"連結"是我想要的! 謝謝 有問題再指教!

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  14. 老師您好,想請教一下SOP格式的問題:
    我申請的是碩士,因為看到網路上有些人會建議SOP盡量在兩頁之內。如果我用字體11,段與段之間沒有空行的話,剛好可以在兩頁內完成,但是看起來比較擁擠。反之,如果我用字體12,段與段之間空一行,比較不會有字擠在一起的感覺,但是會變成兩頁半。您會建議使用兩頁的版本還是使用兩頁半但似乎較易於閱讀的版本呢?
    謝謝您!

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  15. Hi Chris,

    SOP兩頁內寫完最好,與其調整字體大小(一般用12),不如刪去一些內容。有些學校會嚴格規範要在兩頁內,若你申請的學校沒有明確規定,頁數超過一點或許也還好。內容千萬不能擠。大多同學的SOP都寫太多了,有些內容其實是可以不用寫進去的。

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  16. Hi Melody,

    SOP多半不寫工作經驗,除非這個工作與未來所學有關聯。因為還會附上Resume (CV)因此相關的工作經歷多半都寫在履歷裡面就好了。

    段落式的SOP是最常的格式,就像是文章一樣的一個段落一個段落來寫,這種格式已經成了大多申請文件的寫法,我建議還是按照一般規範來做就好。

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  17. 老師您好,
    首先謝謝您的分享,為撰寫sop的我們提供一個方向。
    不過我還是有個問題想請問,就是若提出在校優秀成績表現是否具加分效果?或僅是多此一舉?不過成績若呈現進步趨勢,是否值得提出?
    還有若某教授的激勵是我申請該領域碩士的動機之一,我是否須提出在他課堂內受肯定的表現,但那堂課跟我要申請的只是同為教育領域,並沒有直接相關。
    謝謝您!

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  18. Hi Regina,

    通常SOP的重點在於表達個人的學習目的與計畫。比方說為你什麼要去研究某個領域?以及未來對這個學習領域的具體規劃,這些都會是SOP的重點。如果你覺得成績進步或是某個教授的鼓舞是激勵你去學習的原因之一,當然可以把這些訊息放在SOP裡面。但要小心處理這類的訊息,因為這些訊息要跟學習目的有連結,而不只是想透過SOP一味強調自己的優勢。因為你的成績單會顯示成績進步,其他的優異表現也有CV(履歷)這些文件可以凸顯。所以如果刻意強調這些,把成績與教授鼓舞放進來,但與未來學習規畫連結薄弱,可能會適得其反。

    SOP每個人的寫法與切入點不一樣,所以算是展現個人特色的一份文件。舉例而言,過去有個學生要去唸MBA,SOP一開始就講到小時候數學很好,父親帶她去餐館吃飯,她會計算翻桌率與店家營收,這件事情讓他對商業的經營與相關領域開始產生興趣,一般人其實不會講到童年的事情,但是這個同學有特定的目的,所以當然可以把這個點連結到未來的求學目標。

    另外,在表達自己優點的時候,一定要巧妙且不要太高調,因為這樣反而會讓人留下比較負面的印象,這一點你一定也知道。所以SOP雖是個可以盡情發揮的園地,端看你怎麼鋪陳怎麼去架構你的文章,但也要把握最重要的原則,那就是,所有的訊息都要導向你的學習計畫與求學目的,這個原則不能變,這樣的目的也應該是貫穿全文的要點,只要能做到這些就可以了。

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    1. 謝謝您的回答!
      那請問這樣的原則也是適用於教學型碩士的SOP嗎?

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  19. Hi Regina,

    以上的內容適用於所有的SOP內容。教學型的碩士也一樣。

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  20. 老師您好:
    最近也在準備申請的sop,但由於自己就業需求,所以選擇的學校都是較偏向與企業做連結的學校(非研究型的學校),但我不知道是不是內容上也應該提到自己想做的研究方向,還是只要單純寫program吸引我的地方...

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  21. Hi 仲瑋

    我個人覺得當然還可以提到想要做的研究方向,但是不用寫太多這方面的內容,稍微說明一下就好。所以你的SOP可以包含program吸引你的地方,透過這個點去切入,帶到你有興趣的研究領域,然後再寫希望透過這樣的研究領域去充實實務經驗,這樣最後還是會連結到企業實習與連結相關的內容,因為SOP通常不可能完全不講研究領域,畢竟進學校唸書還是有一定的研究主題。希望我的答案算清楚。

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    1. ChloeYC Ouyang:
      謝謝老師的回覆呀!!仔細思考後正朝這個目標努力中..
      希望申請能一切順利~~~

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  22. 老師你好,
    請問SOP有一個大概的框架嗎?例如:第一段前言,最後一段結論等等。
    我看了兩位身邊同學的SOP,有一位會把不同段落用一個粗體置中標題,有一位就是單純像寫作文那樣,不知道哪一種比較好。第一種會導致不少空間被用在標題,第二種讓我看起來比較零散。
    再請問一下,申請博士的SOP可能研究方向是很重要的一部份,但如果我想要申請的是碩班,而且是non-thesis的碩班,SOP的研究方向或經驗的比重還是要一樣多嗎?
    如果是要著重在就業的方向,請問是要把學校和就業連結在一起嗎?不知道老師有沒有什麼建議。
    謝謝老師!!

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  23. Hi Timothy,

    針對你的問題,我用條列方式回答可能比較清楚。

    1. SOP確實有傳統框架,但是這類的框架只是為了方便我們撰寫,並沒有甚麼不好。若不按照框架來寫也可以,畢竟好的內容才是王道,架構只要不太譁眾取寵或是標新立異都OK。我個人建議不要太花俏或是創新,因為傳統的架構對於審核的委員來說比較容易理解消化,其實是加分。標題或是版型變化有時候是為了讓內容看起來飽滿一點才這麼作,事實上如果條件不符合,即便加了標題或是在編排上費心,也不見得會加分。

    2. SOP是你的學習計畫與研究方向,所以無論如何研究方向比重要多些,如果你有很豐富的個人經驗,無論是工作還是社團,請另寫英文CV(履歷)。很多人的SOP都在寫過去的工作經驗,或是自吹自擂,類似內容實在有點離題,即便這些經驗跟學習規畫有關,也應該點到為止。

    3. 如果你申請的學校與研究範圍並非工作導向,那就不要硬將兩者扯在一起。通常工、商與法學院的學生有時候會將所學與未來的職場規畫連結,這樣做OK,但我個人都建議不要佔太多篇幅,研究方向與學習的規畫還是重點(利他主義的理想最受青睞,也就是一味講到賺錢或是功成名就的充滿銅臭味效果適得其反)。

    4. 附帶一提,申請美國大學最重要的兩個條件是托福成績與在校成績,這兩關過了之後,有學校會再看GRE與GMAT成績之後才會看SOP與履歷。至於介紹信,通常除非是重量級人物幫寫的介紹信,很多介紹信函至始至終都不見得會被拆開來閱讀。所以SOP雖然重要,但是托福成績考好才是留學申請要通過的第一關。

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    1. 感謝老師的回答,我覺得內容的取捨和文字的選擇,要達到言簡意該好難阿!希望提早準備可以給我更多時間修改

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  24. Hi Tim,

    我了解真的不容易,所以切記:要保留相關性強的內容,關聯性弱的內容,即便是很棒的成就獎項,寫出來意義也不大。用詞遣字簡潔俐落也有加分作用。Occam's razor!

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  25. 老師您好
    我想要申請 Computer Science 的 M.S program
    但因為大學畢業後在母校的研究所唸了一年的碩士
    (一部分原因是為了做些研究, 大學比較沒這方面的經驗, 想要利用一年的時間彌補一下)

    想請問這種 case 我應該在 SoP 裡面提到嗎?
    還是說簡單以研究助理帶過?

    感謝老師的回答! 謝謝!

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